Len Vlahos

20 dicas para novos escritores

<p></p>Thanks for submitting another project! It looks like you submitted this one today, but possibly another one 6 days ago. I'm having trouble finding that one. Can you tell me which one it is?<br />For this project regarding attribution, you’ve done a great job making sure the reader always knows who’s speaking, which is especially important in scenes with three or more characters. Nicely done!<br /><br />One thing to watch for, though, is how often names are repeated in the dialogue. While it’s important to establish clarity, using names in nearly every line can start to feel a little unnatural—especially when the characters are already in a shared scene and clearly talking to each other. Think about how people speak in real life: once we know who’s in the conversation, we usually only use names for emphasis, to get someone’s attention, or in moments of emotion.<br /><br />Try reading your dialogue aloud and notice where it feels natural to include a name, and where it might feel repetitive. A small adjustment here can make the rhythm of your dialogue feel more fluid and realistic.<br /><br />Thank you again! Len

<p>RE: Story Outline project... Thanks for submitting another project! You’ve got a solid start here, and I like the setup of David’s character—his flaws and the challenges he faces are relatable and compelling. The idea of using a dream as a vehicle for self-realization is intriguing, and it fits well with the Hero’s Journey structure. In fact, I think you've really nailed the plot beats here. This is a great setup for you to start writing. After I finish a high altitude outline like this, I usually go deeper and start to flesh out actual chapters. This allows me to add detail and dimension. For example, we know that David likes retro gaming and cycling. Maybe turn one of those into an obsession. That will inform his friends, settings you use, etc. But that's just how I work. However you approach it, this is a terrific start. --Len</p>

<p></p>Thank you so much for watching my class, and for submitting a project! I appreciate it.<br />In your first paragraph, it reads as more expository--a description. With the second paragraph, you've added emotion and meaning, which creates a connection with the reader. You're also appreciating what you have in the second paragraph, which is a way of "showing" rather than "telling". Lean into these things when you write. <br />Thanks, and keep writing!Len

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