Revised draft:

 

When we were new, Rosa and I were mid-store. We stood tall next to the table littered with magazines. From here, you could see through more than half of the window. We would watch The Outside. Office workers rushing by, taxis honking, people running, and tourists gawping. Outside is also where Beggar Man would walk his dog. The blue of the sky was disrupted by the RPO building. But from where we stood, you couldn’t see how tall it actually stood. Once a few weeks had passed, Manager allowed us to go to the front of the store, right behind the window display. I could see the RPO building didn’t reach the sky. Not even close. Standing at the front of the store, you could see the Sun on his journey. He glided across the blue, dancing between the building tops. When I was lucky enough to see the Sun, I'd lean my face close to the glass window allowing his nourishment to find me. Whenever Rosa was with me, I'd whisper to her to do the same. It would only last a minute. Then we'd have to return to the magazine table. When we were new, we used to worry that without the Sun beaming onto us, we'd start to grow weaker.

 

Original draft:

 

When we were new, Rosa and I were mid-store, on the magazines table side, and could see through more than half of the window. So we were able to watch the outside –the office workers hurrying by, the taxis, the runners, the tourists, Beggar Man and his dog, the lower part of the RPO Building. Once we were more settled, Manager allowed us to walk up to the front until we were right behind the window display, and then we could see how tall the RPO Building was. And if we were there at just the right time, we would see the Sun on his journey, crossing between the building tops from our side over to the RPO Building side. When I was lucky enough to see him like that, I'd lean my face forward to take in as much of his nourishment as I could, and if Rosa was with me, I'd tell her to do the same. After a minute or two, we'd have to return to our positions, and when we were new, we used to worry that because we often couldn't see the Sun from mid-store, we'd grow weaker and weaker.