Kartikay Ungrish

Aprenda 4 estilos de escrita para melhorar sua escrita criativa, redação e habilidades de escrita de conteúdo

Congratulations on getting ahead of others by submitting a project. It's an excellent persuasive sales pitch; you should be proud of your work. I feel you have nailed the point and are addressing your audience's pain point. However, I suggest making your writing a little more compact to have a stronger impact on readers.For instance, instead of writing other leaky ballpoint pens, you could have omitted the word other; it sounds better. The second example from your text - Try this sentence. Let me introduce you to a leakproof .5mm Sharpie flex pen. You would agree that these small tweaks would make your writing more effective. Remember, when you are persuading someone something, you need to be to the point to use the audience's small attention span. I hope you implement these suggestions and i am sure you have in you to be a good writer.I would love to see more projects from you and kindly post them vertically next time around; it would be easy to read and evaluate for me.Finally, one small request: if you like this class, kindly post a positive review about it in the review section of this class so that it can reach a larger audience. Thanks and all the best!

Thank you! My apologies, I didn't know it posted sideways until it uploaded and I had no idea on how to fix it.

The item I chose to do my persuasion piece on was a fake sharpie pen.

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