Piotr Złotorowicz

Pon en marcha la escritura del guión: todo lo que necesitas saber para escribir tu primer guion 

Hello Amanda, Great work on this assignment! Your logline is excellent – it has all three essential components clearly stated: the protagonist (a dreamy bunny cop), the goal (find missing predators), and the obstacle (small animals aren't taken seriously in this city). The setup immediately tells us what kind of story we're getting into. One small suggestion: consider changing the word "missing" to something that suggests foul play or criminal activity. For example, instead of "find missing predators," you might say "find kidnapped predators" or "investigate predators who have vanished under suspicious circumstances." This creates more tension and immediately signals that there's criminal activity involved, which raises the stakes. But this is just a suggestion – your logline is already very strong! Synopsis: Your synopsis is really well-written! The structure is solid and engaging. One suggestion for improvement: you could be more specific with the second half of the movie. I understand that for this Skillshare project you might not want to give away too much of your screenplay, but remember that when you show this to producers or other industry professionals, they'll want more detail about what happens in Act 2 and 3. You don't need to change it here, but keep that in mind for future professional submissions – give them at least one more paragraph explaining the second part of the film. Additionally, since this is an animation project, it would be very helpful to add a short paragraph at the end of your synopsis describing the animation style. Is this planned as traditional 2D animation, 3D CGI, stop-motion, or a specific visual style? What films or animation styles are you referencing? In live-action, producers can infer production style from the action, but with animation, they really need to know what kind of visual approach you're envisioning. Treatment: Your treatment opening is engaging! Going forward, remember that treatments should be much more detailed about what's happening in each scene and how things look visually. A producer reading your treatment needs to be able to assess how much the film will cost and how long it will take to produce, so specific details really matter. To help you see how professional treatments work, I'm sharing this example treatment by Craig Mazin: [<a href="https://johnaugust.com/Assets/id_thief_treatment.pdf%5D" rel="nofollow noreferrer noopener" target="_blank">johnaugust.com/Assets/id_thief_treatment.pdf]</a> This film was made: [<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2024432/%5D" rel="nofollow noreferrer noopener" target="_blank">www.imdb.com/title/tt2024432/]</a>. I recommend reading treatments from well-known films, then watching the actual movie to see how the treatment translated to screen – this is one of the best ways to learn the format. Story Notes: I really love your story concept! The twist that predators are the ones going missing (making them the "prey") is clever and adds an interesting layer to the narrative. The idea of a bunny hero solving this mystery is compelling, and I especially like that you've created a partnership between the idealistic police academy graduate bunny and the street-smart fox. I can imagine there would be fantastic banter and comedic tension between these two characters with such different worldviews and backgrounds. Keep up the excellent work, and best of luck moving forward with this project!

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Zootopia - Logline, Synopsis and Treatment

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