Hey Ruth, here's the edited edition. I changed a few more words that make it shorter and more direct (I believe). I also changed the font to the one I use for my brand and Mrs. Scared was not amused I had used the 'wrong' font.

Thank you for the helpful feedback!

 

"Hi, I’m Lucy Lambriex, a creative guide for inner exploration. I take creative professionals and professional creatives on light and fun Inner Journeys, using photography and writing as the main tools.

I’m on a mission to provide you with the tools and guidance to free yourself from your Inner Critic's grip, so you can move from self-doubt to creative power."

 

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Hi Ruth, thanks for the lovely short class. Below is my first go at this, using your worksheet as the basis. I may have made it too long for your liking as I added some more relevant info, and I would love to hear your feedback.

"Hi, I’m Lucy Lambriex, a creative guide for inner exploration. I take creative professionals and professional creatives on light and fun Inner Journeys, that use photography and writing as the main tools.

I’m on a mission to provide as many of you as possible with the tools and guidance to free yourself from the grip of your Inner Critic, so you can move from self-doubt to creative power."