Marshall Rimmer

How to Win the Internet: Writing for Sketch Comedy

It seems that Celtx is a bit quirky. You have to go to File &gt; Print. Inside the print pop-up, there should be a PDF button where you can "Save as PDF".

O,thanks i got it,i was hoping to film this but i wasn't able to due to time and the bad weather we've been having but here it is.

Hey Duron, would you mind uploading your file as a PDF instead of .celtx? It'll be easier to view that way. Thanks!

I'm not sure how to do that honestly ,how can i?

Really well thought-out sketch! The punch at the end really helps pay off the set-up. I can't wait to see it in proper script format. I have a few notes on the story.1) look into switching the initial candy bar bit and the axe body spray bit. You may want the bite of the candy bar to be the last thing to happen before he goes up to talk to the girl, otherwise, we might see the chocolate in his teeth and that would give away the ending.2) On the screen, there might be a bit too much time between Ron exiting and Greg exiting. It's not really important that we see them get into the car and that might eat up unnecessary time. Are you seeing a jump in time here? If not, maybe they just have the final discussion outside the store and he possibly looks into a mirror in another shop window? I do like them being inside the car, but think of how they get there without wasting 5-10 seconds of screen time.3) I'd like to see what it looks like if the first sign that Greg was getting screwed over wasn't so obvious. What if it were something more subtle that made Ron question him. "Are you sure? That doesn't sound right." "That's what she said. She gave me her number and everything!" If it's obvious that he's getting screwed over first thing, the ending moment doesn't have as much of a build and subsequently will have less of a laugh. Maybe you still use the store closing at 8, but instead of the spit-take, Ron's reaction is "I dunno man, I'm pretty sure this place closes at 11."Other than that, it looks really great. I hope you end up shooting it!

This is the link to my finished project.https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B1z6DxxLRwixRWFaN0s0R3FIaDQ/edit?usp=sharingFavorite comedy: Austin powers, fifty first dates, lyre lyre, blue streak, scary movie1.2.3, hot fuzz, zombie land, super bad, hang over, Grown ups est.Favorite TV shows: Chapel show, George Lopez, fresh prince of bell air, Family Guy how I met your mother, big bang theory that 70&rsquo;s show, Wayne brothers.Favorite comedy: Dave chapel, Corey Holcomb, Mike eps, Eric Andr&eacute;a, Bobby lee, Chris D'Elia, Arie spears, Kevin hart.Passionate topics: Movies, Anime, my family, stupid people, bad commercials, myself.this will be the first class of this nature that iv done,but im plannig on networking and getting and giving feed back from and to everyone in my class.

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