Josiah (Jazza) Brooks

How to Talk and Present to Camera like a Pro!

Yo - I saw your parody of a character design session a few months ago and I pissed myself laughing, so separate to this submission, rest assured you've got some comedy/timing chops! You've got a great attitude and energy when filming, your personality really comes across and has a clear shape, and it's really enjoyable! The visual framing of the opening wasn't clear until the activity started, I suggest only using the PIP view you set up when you start using both angles at once (the top-cam is in use) - in future if all you do is talk to the camera for a minute or two, make sure the visuals of the frame are focused on you in the same way you want the viewer to be! You could cut in your edit a little more aggressively, there are occasional dead-spots where you're either getting into the activity or moving between points, nothing major but with the comedic style you're going for, being a little more 'snappy' can do wonders. Your comedic 'punches' are great, you've got a good instinct in timing and pulling a laugh out of the viewer (IE the "You're Beautiful" song moment), catching people off guard and having fun with some good-old fashioned self-deprecating humor, hone in on that, it's a strength and you've got a natural instinct - see how far you can push it! Have fun experimenting, trying new things, failing, it's all part of the fun but this is something I see a lot of potential in for your content. The 'point' of the video wasn't entirely clear, as far as why you are making a sandwich or what the goal is, I suggest thinking of your content (at least in general) with the magic 3 parts, beginning, middle and end. The beginning is the setup, make a premise clear and establish what you will do. Middle is the conflict, this is where the comedy can shine since you can have fun digging yourself holes and trying to get out of them, but always in the context of trying to work towards the closure to the premise you established, which brings us to the end, closure - where you complete the task (or fail spectacularly), the viewer should feel like there's a clear direction and journey they're going on you with rather than feeling confused as they might at times watching this (deliver as if your viewer doesn't know about me or my course, but as if this is a standalone concept you're delivering. You might refer to my course as a reason, but make sure your content stands on it's own). The end montage was a GREAT conclusion, I'd also encourage you in a video like this, to take a hit for the team and take a big-ol-bite of that sandwich yourself - you talked a lot about how great it would taste, a great conclusion would have you sticking to the narrative you established, which gives us (the viewer) the satisfaction of watching you ACTUALLY like it (a surprise to use), or gag and regret it (equally as satisfying!) Fantastic work here my friend, keep it up and thanks for submitting!

(Again this is my moms account, this is Sammy xD) Thanks for all the feedback! I've really loved watching your videos and making my own content. You've been a huge inspiration. You told me that if I wanted too I could be an amazing artist. Thanks to you I have kept going. Later this week I am going to be posting my very first comic! And I have you to thank for it. I will make sure to shoot you an email with my comic in it. 
As for your advice I will make sure to take all of that into account. My original plan was to eat the sandwhich, but I couldn't as I was fasting at the time. So as to still make it work I did the little montage of getting someone else to eat it.

Thank you for the advice and feedback. And thank you for being such and inspiration I hope to get to a point where I can support a family off of what I make from making comics and videos.

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