Enongo Lumumba-Kasongo

Hiphop-Songwriting: Schreiben ohne Klischees

Hi Myles! Thanks so much for sharing this -- I'm really glad that the class was able to help you with counting bars; it's such a critical part of hip hop music-making. I had a little bit of trouble making out everything that you were saying in the verse, but I very much enjoyed your flow and the sing-songey nature of your delivery. From what I could hear, I also appreciated that you kept things dynamic through your use of rhyme -- for example your use of internal rhyme with "trucker" and "pucker" added a real sense of dynamism to the piece. I'd love to see the written lyrics to have a better sense of the content of the bars, but overall this was dope to listen to. Thank you for participating and I hope you continue to write and record1

Hi Enongo! I really appreciate the feedback, I guess I was too close to the song to notice my vocals were pretty low. Thanks again, I really enjoyed the course here is my lyrics below:

Hook:
When I was in first year 
I thought I had no fear 
Then I got to second year 
I want to get out of here 

Verse:
I was stuck between a rock and hard place, I never fit in, I wasn’t winning 
I felt like a trucker tryna pull up in a space 
Couldn’t pucker up the courage had to get out of this place 
Running on assumptions 
Running out of options 
It’s homicide or suicide 
Sit or stand it’s do or die 
Now when I’m feeling stressed 
I’m still feeling blessed 
Cause I’ve got my yesterdays in check, yet 

Hook

I found this course to be useful in understanding the basics (I never actually knew how to count bars). My song is about my not so smooth transition from the first year of university to the second. Hope you enjoy  
 
 
 
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