Hello teacher Vlad!

I've been making shorts everyday for a week now and I think they are coming along nicely. I do want to ask for some feedback though since even though I think I am making each video better than the one before I still can't seem to get all that good of a retention (around a maximum of 30-40% after the first 20 or so seconds). I want to get really good at this but I am not sure entirely  what to focus on in terms of improvement(Right now I think it is mainly my audio quality which I will fix with a new mic). Any advice is appreciated.

This is my latest video which of the time I am writing this I think is my best :d