I've been working on this for a while now, but I can tell that there's still much more work to be done. 

This is basically a Science Fiction/Fantasy adventure intended for the Middle Grade Graphic Novel Market. 

I've been following and studying your courses for a while now, and I aspire to achieve what you did with your Shark Summer Graphic Novel. 

Any further feedback you can give me would be much appreciated, as well as any guidance on where I can go from there. 

I've already completed your Graphic Novel Pitch Course and would love to learn more from you. 

Many Thanks

PS

This is currently the second draft of my pitch, based on some previous feedback made with the original draft. Any further feedback and guidance is appreciated.