Daniel Gonzales

ATA: The Art of Visual Storytelling

I think your image tells the story brilliantly. My main advice would be to vary the grays on the bus (side darker grey, back lighter gray perhaps) to give it a bit more dimension.

I like it!  I would like to see the girls expression more so you could turn her slightly.  Or you could have us looking at her through the back bus window.  If I have time I will do some sketches to show what I mean.  Did you join the facebook group so I can post my suggestions on facebook or if you give me your email I can email. them to you.


Thank you Dustin, I really appreciate it. I will try do some sketches based on your suggestion...my computer broke down so just waiting for it to be fixed so I could do revisions and post updated stuff.
And yes, I did join the facebook group and shared the link there as well and my email is rastogi.ruch@gmail.com. Thank you so much! 

There's a very nice sense of direction and leading the eye here, nice work!

Thank you, Trey. I was just admiring your work. Beautifully done concepts and nice lighting. That is something I need to work towards.

<p>A girl goes to a picnic with her classmates. On the way back sees a balloon vendor. Stops to purchase balloons and misses her bus.<img src="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/d816762f3e52759df1e45cccf232013a/b791e447" alt="Untitled - image 1 - student project" srcset="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/d816762f3e52759df1e45cccf232013a/b791e447 600w, http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/d816762f3e52759df1e45cccf232013a/b791e447 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy"></p>


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