Daniel Gonzales

ATA: The Art of Visual Storytelling

I love the values and variation of "camera" angles in your sequence. Frame 17 is such a great shot! You can imagine the Minotaur breathing on the back of Theseus' neck!

=D Thanks!
I really tried my best on those things =D

I love the pacing of this, I can really imagine this tense situation. I thought the action got a little clear from frame 15 though - it looks like he's dropping the flame, as if he's seen something, but then in the next two frames it looks like the minotaur has approached him unexpectedly from behind? Or maybe I was just confused as to what was happening in that particular set of frames. Anyway, awesome job!

=D
Thanks for the kind words!

I'm really happy that you could figure out that theseus drops his torch, I found that a hard shot to get clear.
In frame 15 Theseus drops his torch because he's reached a dead end. The minotaur had been chasing him in the shots before that (though I'm not sure I've communicated that clearly..)
In frame 17 the minotaur has reached Theseus, who realises it in shot 18, and then we don't know what happens. (woooooo~ ~  spooky)



Ah okay, then the reason he drops the torch wasn't clear to me, but I got it! I could defo tell the minotaur was chasing him from 11-14, but I think it's only clear it's a chase and not a zoom in when you start swinging the camera at odd angles. I think you might benefit by showing how fast the minotaur is if you made that scene more different - like Theseus really far away, a dot of light in the distance, then a mid-range like you have, then much closer? As of right now those four shots are sort of similar-ish and don't show as much movement. I dunno if it would be better or not, but maybe if you experiment with something like that it may add to tension!

Thanks for the feedback!
It seems like a good idea, it would convey speed and distance more then it does right now, but I wouldn't know how I should make a transition to frame 15 when the minotaur already has reached theseus in frame 14 o.o

Hi! I find the best way to critique a story telling piece is to ask questions to point out the problems. This will allow me to show you whats a bit unclear and what things you need to solve to strengthen your story telling images. There are multiple ways to solve the issues I'll bring up so have fun exploring them!

Is there any way to increase the size of the images. I can see some great use of value but I'm not able to see much detail bc its so tiny :(

Hi there!
Oh I didn't think it would turn out so small o_o
I'll post a larger version immediately!

Alrighty I uploaded a larger version! =)
I'm looking forward to your feedback!


Also, I think most of the projects can be viewed larger if you right click and then click "open image in a new tab" (because i think skillshare automatically resizes everything!)

Great start Esther  the mountain is very threatening  love the whole feel of the image
Where I would go from here is have the world seem less threating the large trees  in the midground could be more rounder and become the sharper more twisted tree that grew up on the side of the mountain  Also break up the mountain a bit more so that it does not seem so manmade(unless it is)


It's a good idea to make the part of the world where the characters are coming from more friendly :)

The mountain is indeed a mix between man-made and natural :)

This is a very atmospheric, emotional piece, and it draws the eye really well up to the mountain peak. When I saw the characters in the foreground, my impression was that they are on a dangerous journey to save something very important.

Hooray! =D
That's exactly what I was aiming for! 

Thanks guys ^_^
Indeed the characters on the foreground still need some work because they aren't very visible to the viewer yet.
I'll post an update this weekend ^_^

This is fun to look at.  Write about your story and what you want to communicate with this scene and I can give you some feedback

Anna Flagg already described the story for me :)
I'm still curious what you think is going on in my painting.

ok cool.  Again It looks good keep going!  It is hard to see the characters in the foreground so give them some more contrast.  If the trees on the mountain are natural not planted by man then maybe have them spaced a little less predictable.  They all look about the same distance apart.  I think it would make it more interesting if some of the trees were grouped together.  

Beautiful work! The shapes on the mountain are very strong and also imposing, and everything really draws your eyes to the peak, and wondering what's up there. The character in the foreground is a little lose in the overall image though, as I didn't notice it the first time I looked at the picture. Maybe adding more of a highlight to it might help, if you did want it to stand out (or if it was just supposed to be part of the background element, then nevermind!)

Amazing job!

Thanks for the compliment and feedback! =D
I do need to make the characters stand out a bit more, you're right on that ;)

It took me some time but here's my version of Theseus and the Minotaur! =D
I'd love to hear some feedback from you guys ^_^
<img src="http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/098/b/3/theseus_and_the_minotaur__a_horror_story_by_slippereend-d60wqef.jpg" alt="Theseus and the Minotaur - image 1 - student project" width="1505" height="6012" srcset="http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/098/b/3/theseus_and_the_minotaur__a_horror_story_by_slippereend-d60wqef.jpg 600w, http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/098/b/3/theseus_and_the_minotaur__a_horror_story_by_slippereend-d60wqef.jpg 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy">
Alrighty!
Here's an updated version of my painting :)
<img src="http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-9n45Ouix9rQ/UU7Wxgm8YNI/AAAAAAAAAWk/Z2XVYMXl2Zk/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass5.jpg" alt="Theseus and the Minotaur - image 2 - student project" width="1600" height="1066" srcset="http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-9n45Ouix9rQ/UU7Wxgm8YNI/AAAAAAAAAWk/Z2XVYMXl2Zk/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass5.jpg 600w, http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-9n45Ouix9rQ/UU7Wxgm8YNI/AAAAAAAAAWk/Z2XVYMXl2Zk/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass5.jpg 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy">
 I've started my story too, though it still needs some work :) I'll post an updated version this weekend! =D
<img src="http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-amQaFnT11vE/UUuO4VwbKuI/AAAAAAAAAWU/uZDEBI3YtAI/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass3jpg.jpg" alt="Theseus and the Minotaur - image 3 - student project" width="1600" height="1066" srcset="http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-amQaFnT11vE/UUuO4VwbKuI/AAAAAAAAAWU/uZDEBI3YtAI/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass3jpg.jpg 600w, http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-amQaFnT11vE/UUuO4VwbKuI/AAAAAAAAAWU/uZDEBI3YtAI/s1600/VisualStorytellingClass3jpg.jpg 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy">

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