Daniel Gonzales

ATA: The Art of Visual Storytelling

Thanks for all the input. I've gotten good feedback both from this site, the facebook page, and reality. So I'll definitely re-work this. I was hoping to do it tomorrow during my day off. 

B Black: I've never heard of Radio Mystery Theatre, but it sounds like something that's up my alley. I'm a huge fan of The Twilight Zone and started working my way through Alfred Hitchcock Presents. Both excellent series. 

Matthew-  Radio Mystery Theater with the  narrating voice of E.G. Marshall had a compelling opening that sent shivers down my spine as a kid.  Here's a treat... the opening segment of music, effects, and narration... goosebumps:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O6zexKWB-CQ

My favorite episode was "The Man Who Turned Inside Out!" which I cannot find, but your visual reminded me of that.

I can just hear your story coming to life:  "I can't breathe.  I can't (gurgle sound of vomiting)...  It's as if...  God,the pain!  

"Matthew, you need a doctor."

"It's as if something is alive in me and wants...  (sound of vomiting)."

"O, Matthew, Matthew, you're sick.  We should go to the hospital!"

"I don't think I can walk.  My chest is starting to..."

"I'm getting the car."

Matthew, you really have something special here.

Thanks, I'm hoping my storytelling abilities overshadow my drawing shortcomings, but I'm glad you get an idea of the story. Although, I dunno if it'll be me throwing this up, ha. But anyways, thanks for the link and i'll certainly check out some of these myself. But I think you'll find what you're looking for here. 

http://www.cbsrmt.com/?s=synopsis&amp;y=all

Matthew, this is one wild and brilliant idea that might have played years ago on The Radio Mystery Theater.  Sure, there might be some physical logistics to work out here--much like the Matrix where you start with nothing but confusion, but this really is one messed-up idea in a very complimentary way.  Wow.  Terrific!

The composition as well seems to drawn me in to the picture at several angles:  the perspective line on the left wall and window, the right line on the chest of drawers.  The off-kilter angle adds to the "confusion" of the character.  Nice.

I wondered if the composition would be clearer if the body was facing towards the audience and we could compare the faces and see:  "OMG,  it is an adult but looks just like him!"

Dunno.  Regardless, way, way out-of-the-box stuff that great stories are made of.  Pleasantly surprised.  Thanks.

Fun!

At first I thought dead baby too - are you getting at a just-born baby on the floor? If so, perhaps something like an outstretched hand or angling it so you can see its crying mouth orsomething. Its prone position coupled with the guy's desperate look make it seem dead.

<p>Pass #2 and as soon as I've uploaded, I already see improvements, but certainly more readable, I hope.&nbsp;</p>
<p><img src="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/81db4be1" alt="The Birth - image 1 - student project" srcset="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/81db4be1 600w, http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/81db4be1 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy"><img src="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/fb169690" alt="The Birth - image 2 - student project" srcset="http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/fb169690 600w, http://s3.amazonaws.com/skillshare/uploads/project/4b2ad316e2f9f7112483e46e7ade371f/fb169690 1000w" sizes="(max-width: 600px) 600px, 100vw" loading="lazy">I'm not sure if this is the beginning or the end, but this man &nbsp;just threw up a clone of himself.</p>


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