Story telling in travel vlogs

Story telling in travel vlogs - student project

As I traveled around the Himalayas I filmed my experience. However, I was not sure how to make an engaging video that people would watch and enjoy. Joined skillshare to watch this vlog tutorial specifically. 

In the video, I have tried to introduce the characters, tried to keep a flow of the video and removing parts which would put people to sleep. I would love to know what I could have done better.