Thanks to Danny's advice! Some simple changes, and the story already has better flow. Any other feedback still welcome, as always :)
I concentrated on the part of the story where Ariadne falls in love with Theseus and tries to seduce and help him.
For the sake of staying under 20 frames, I cut down my original thumbs almost in half. Coincidently, I feel like this storyboard jumps around a bit too much and I could definitely fill in some gaps to clarify what is going on. Perhaps I should have just focused on one scene... I'd love to hear your feedback! Thanks!
This image is showing a girl and her rabbit-monster friend sneaking around a beast, as the beast is waking up. The image should convey that the girl is cunning and has a spark of bravery, while her friend is more aware of the dangers they are about to face and is scared out of it's wits! The rabbit friend vigorously tries to tell the girl that they are in trouble. I showed this through applying the "relationship," "angle," and "shape" rules.
Below are my thumbnails. I think some of them are much more dynamic than my final image, but I also think they could all be part of a storyboard sequence. I am very open to feedback! Thanks!