With the feedback Daniel suggested to me, I reworked the last few spreads of Act I. I managed to condense the story from 12 spreads to 8 (possibly 7 if I feel that spread 4 is unnecessary):
This version focuses more on how the creature appears before the girl, this line of events makes it more natural for me to continue the story into Act II (which I haven't yet got a very clear idea of). ________________________________________
Hey fellow classmates!
For this project I'll be working on my Children's Book Narrative: Lucky You. The process of this narrative is I make the Illustration before the actual text for the story; the premise and structure of the story is already set, all that's left is the illustration process. This is my first attempt at a Children's book where all my other work are usually more serious and dark (Theme, Illustration and Writing)
The premise is: A lost child stumbles upon an injured creature in a forest dense of creatures, but she's never afraid of it and tends it so that she isn't alone. In time, the creature warms up to the child and when the child wanted to take the creature into her home town it was discriminated and was hunted down.
The Dilemma: So I've pretty much got a clear image of of Act 1 (Intro, Setting and First Crisis) and most of Act 3 (Conflict, Resolve, Farewell and Conclusion) but I'm struggling to picture what Act 2 can consist of. It needs to show a progression between the 2 main characters bonding.
The story revolves around Remi the little girl who gets lost:
Soon the story will introduce Rae-Rae (Short for Radiant) the injured creature:
So far on this project I have drafted out (minus Spread 1) 12 Spreads (24 pages) which make up the entirity of Act 1: