I listen to too much black flag

I listen to too much black flag - student project

I listen to too much black flag - image 1 - student projectHi guys:

I started with a phrase I had illustrated previously REALLY horribly so I could check my progress over time. The original  phrase I lettered about a year ago looked like this. Brace yourself:

I listen to too much black flag - image 2 - student project

So yeah.  Sorry you had to see that.  Awful.  I set some dot guides on sone Bristol board since I had no quad paper handly and tried some different styles as practice.   I don't know that I am commitedto any of them but just wanted some practice.  Ideally I want to improve my flourishes and embellishments to become better at the "1920's whiskey bottle" type lettering and design.  Here is what I have now:

I listen to too much black flag - image 3 - student project