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10.9 - UPDATE

I've changed the title to my project and revised my logline.  Everyone had really helpful suggestions - thank you!!!!.  I think it still needs work but is an improvement.  Would love any feedback on the revision.  Thanks!!

Logline revision:

A single Midwestern woman fascinated by movies about eccentric families and disheartened with her conventional surroundings, relocates to Los Angeles. After meeting the perfect guy, she finds herself tangled up with his oddball family, realizing not all stories have a happy ending and must fight for her own.

10.2 - Logline revision:

An unattached Midwestern woman filled with the doldrums relocates to Los Angeles in search of a movie-themed life, only to discover not all stories guarantee a happy ending.

First pass of logline:

A bored Midwestern woman relocates to Los Angeles in search of a movie-themed life, only to discover not all movies guarantee a happy ending.

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