Chris, think your suggestions are spot on. Think it's better though the areas I drew in are a little extra wonky. did some and then some more. The last is the one posted on top and at the bottom of this posting. Thank you for taking the time, I know you are especially busy right now.
As for your suggestion on printing and trying, it's a good idea. I try to treat my sketchbook as a place to play and experiment. I do not have space for much more finished art and doubt anyone would actually want to buy anything I painted so sketchbooks allow an outlet without filling up the house... Still, printing would allow me to play with color schemes etc so good suggestion.