Cack: An MC Interrupted by Dancers (One-Line description and first sketch)

Cack: An MC Interrupted by Dancers (One-Line description and first sketch) - student project

Hey all, I'm working on a video for a track called 'Cack,' that has three emcees. The main artists want to feature a krump dancer, and it needs to be filmed in one day.

ONE-LINE SUMMARY (work in progress):
Three MCs take turns rapping at a camera, but the camera is more interested in a man in the background, who keeps leading us into slightly surreal dance scenes.

quick concept sketch:

Cack: An MC Interrupted by Dancers (One-Line description and first sketch) - image 1 - student project

Thinking of something possibly one-take, where we start with an MC walking with the camera, the Krump homie walks behind him, and the camera veers off, following him. We follow him, and he just goes in, really just wilin out for a couple bars, and then, bam, suddenly just starts walking normal like nothing happened, walks behind the MC and we're back on the MC again, hanging with him 90s hype williams style. Krump dancer guy is gone. 

2 bars of rapping, then he walks through again, and the camera swings with him. Maybe there's some graphics involved, and it's almost like every time dude walks through the frame he takes us on this slight quick surreal adventure.

Hit me with any thoughts on this first concept, how can I make it better?

Saleem Reshamwala
Basically, I make Sesame Street for adults