Bitter End

Bitter End - student project

Final. I think. Still open to feedback.

Bitter End - image 1 - student project

Here is my sketch. I chose the phrase "Bitter End". I may go back and add "Till the" once I have these letters worked out. I was going for a Jon Contino esque look.  

Bitter End - image 2 - student project

Here is what I ended up with after a pass in Illustrator. I made some changes from my initial sketch and messed around with the letter spacing.

Bitter End - image 3 - student project

With a grunge effect:

Bitter End - image 4 - student project

I'm not quite satisfied with the result. Hopefully you guys have some good feedback and advice!