I would love feedback. This is my first time doing any sort of lettering, and can use all the suggestions I can get!
I think the two words are competing for emphasis. I wanted the "Stagedive" to sort of leap of the edge, as if stagediving - but I think it doesn't go far enough. Was also thinking about drawing some simple hands underneath it.
It helps to see it here vs on the page, for some reason... perhaps because I'm used to looking at design that way?
New sketch, will bring it into Illustrator tomorrow for tracing.
It's amazing how much more comfortable I am in Illustrator than with a pencil. Sad, but true. Final submission below. I'm not 100% happy, but I'm glad that I saw it through!