Act 2 checkpoints

Hi,

just real quick I wanted to convey that I spent about a month on act 2 because I wanted it to be the actual act 2 for my story and not just a project submission. Because it is more or less the entire narrative for act 2, it's much longer than the assignment called for which I apologize for. I had some periods of struggle, and many things got taken out or rewritten. Because of this, it may seem kind of erratic but I tried my best to keep the narrative flowing reasonably while keeping the plot and story from being hacky, campy, cliche, etc. Again I'm sorry for the long read but it's finally done so I am just going to submit what I have, 

 

Thanks

 

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CRISIS:

Senshi is devastated by his expulsion from his family's organization which he has put his whole life into, as he is confronted with signs that he is still the failure he has been trying to prove he is not, and he tries to deal with the rage he harbors toward himself for bring this misery upon his life and everyone else's

 

Senshi feels defeated as he realizes there is nothing he can do.

 

STRUGGLE:

Senshi realizes something was off about the nearly failed mission and investigates it to discover how his mission was stymied and find whoever was responsible so he can redeem himself by returning to his father Ryu with the one(s) who brought harm to their family and hopefully regain his position.

 

  • Senshi expresses worry to Kenichi.
  • Senshi says goodbye to everyone.
  • Senshi leaves the family.
  • Senshi prepares for solitary life.
  • Senshi sets up shop in an extended stay.
  • Senshi changes his appearance (haircut, tattoo cover up)
  • Senshi goes out to observe, eavesdrop, & gather info (radar hearing aid app)
  • Senshi observes / overhears some clues (his own name, tattoo, unnamed boss)
  • Senshi interrogates one & learns rival family X is still strong & under new management.
  • Senshi incapacitates the man in the bathroom and goes back out to the club.

 

  • Senshi tries to leave and is approached by a drunk girl (Hina) chatting him up.
  • Senshi uses her to make a quiet getaway.
    • Hina gets a call & makes a scene cuz her ride bailed on her.
    • In an effort to quiet her Senshi offers to call her an Uber.
    • She agrees, saying she's staying at the same hotel he is.
    • Senshi says this but goes to call the Uber anyway.
    • Hina offers to share the Uber ride.
    • Senshi says he drove here.
    • Hina just asks if she can catch a ride then.
    • Senshi agrees & the two drive off.
  • The two return to the hotel & she forgot what room she was in.
  • Senshi brings her to his room and helps her sober up before she passes out.
  • Senshi keeps his gun nearby and cautiously sleeps on the couch.
  • Senshi wakes up from a flashback dream & finds Hina still sleeping.
  • Senshi wakes her up and they get to know each other over breakfast.
  • At breakfast Senshi learns she was a part of Hinotori family.
  • Senshi stays with her to get more info about his failed mission.
  • The two are secretly photographed by an unknown person.

 

  • Senshi immediately says they need to leave.
  • The two are pursued and attacked upon leaving.
  • During the chase, Senshi and Hina argue and are suspicious of each other.
  • Senshi outmaneuvers their tail & causes them to crash.
  • Senshi goes to interrogate the driver and finds him dead.
  • Senshi takes the driver's ID, phone, and license plate # for research.
  • Kenichi calls Senshi to check up on him and the two talk for a bit.
  • Kenichi gets off the phone and reports to Ryu who tasked him with helping keep an eye on Senshi.
  • Ryu and Kenichi discuss their concern for Senshi.
  • Ryu expresses regret about casting Senshi out but they agree that it is a necessary action to help him.

 

  • Senshi and Hina go to a bar/restaurant to discuss what happened.
  • The two exchange vague details of how they ended up where they are.
  • Senshi learns that Hina is in a similar position as he is.
  • Senshi sees on TV that the man he interrogated earlier was later executed for some reason.
  • Senshi concludes that the same people who sabotaged his mission want him dead.
  • Hina is angered that Senshi put her in danger but says she thought they were after her.
  • The two reveal their true identity to each other and are both shocked.
  • The two argue about how and why their families have caused the other to suffer.
  • The two conclude that it doesn't matter because they are both cast out anyway.
  • Senshi explains his mission and asks what she intends to do about her situation.

 

  • Hina tells Senshi she wants to reclaim her family's home & burial ground.
  • Hina says her grandma is being held as collateral to prevent an upheavel against the new leader.
  • Senshi tells Hina he thinks the new Shibito leader is trying to kill him and destroy his family.
  • Senshi tells Hina he will help her if she will help him find answers.
  • The two agree to help each other and share resources & information.
  • Hina tells Senshi she has a friend who might be able to help.
  • Senshi says he still has a friend inside Kensho family (Kenichi) who can also help.
  • Hina says they must be careful not to give too much info to anyone still on the inside for safety reasons.
  • Senshi agrees and the two discuss how they will start gathering intel.
  • They agree to start by meeting with Hina's friend.

 

  • Hina calls her friend Luis and asks to meet for lunch.
  • Luis recommends a spot he loves outside the metropolis in the southern suburbs by the ocean.
  • Hina explains as much as she can over the phone so Luis knows she has company.
  • The two gather supplies, secure their belongings, and prepare to leave
  • They get on the highway and head out of town toward the restaurant.
  • On the way Hina tells Senshi about herself, Luis, & their history in Hinotori crime family.
  • They arrive and meet Luis, a flamboyant hispanic man with a warm larger than life personality.
  • Luis says he's been laying low since the government takedown of Hinotori family.
  • Luis says his lover Kaito is still involved with the family who was manipulated to turn against him.
  • The three get to know each other a bit over food & drinks, and Luis asks why she wanted to meet.

 

  • Hina tells Luis about her situation of being displaced and separated from her grandma.
  • Senshi tells about his experience of being betrayed, and about his mission to find the truth and redeem himself.
  • Luis tells them about how Shibito convinced Kaito that Luis is a double agent using him for intel.
  • Luis says Kaito shot him and left him to die then shows him the scar in his lower left abdomen (liver).
  • Luis tells them that he was found by boy in the slums who was fishing for his family's dinner.
  • Luis says he was in the hospital for a while but his liver regenerated and he made a nearfull recovery.
  • A tipsy Luis gets emotional and says he wishes he could straighten things out with Kaito tell him the truth of the matter.
  • Hina asks Luis why he hasn't done that yet.
  • Luis says he is not a double agent but he had wronged Kaito and is ashamed of himself.
  • Luis tells them Kaito found out he was monitoring his digital activity but that it was jealousy not malice.

 

  • Hina suggests arranging a multipurpose meeting with Kaito for Luis to explain himself and for Hina & Senshi to get intel.
  • Luis says there's no way Kaito will agree to a meeting.
  • Senshi asks what Kaito wants bad enough to agree meeting for.
  • Luis hesitates but confesses he has an ancient heirloom from Kaito's family.
  • Luis takes off his necklace and shows them a very old deep green bagua feng shui jade pendant.
  • Luis says he has wanted to return it but has not been able to bring himself to.
  • Hina comforts Luis and says he's like family to her and will always be there for him.
  • Senshi says if they meet that he will act as a bodyguard for Luis.
  • Luis says it should have been done long ago and agrees to reach out.
  • Luis sends an encrypted message using code familiar to himself and Kaito indicating he wants to return the necklace.

 

  • He gets a response asking where.
  • Luis says to meet at their favorite coffee shop in town.
  • The three prepare their gear and turn in for the night.
  • The next morning they drive back into town in Luis' van which has an illegal mod that can change the appearance of its body panels.
  • Hina & Senshi stay in the van while Luis goes into the coffee shop.
  • Luis finds Kaito at a table in the coffee shop and he has both their coffees on the table.
  • Kaito is polite but seems withdrawn, show very little in terms of emotion.
  • The two catch up for a bit over coffee and Luis pulls out the pendant.
  • Kaito politely takes it back and thanks Luis for returning it.
  • Senshi & Hina listen in through Lui’s phone while Luis asks about business.
  • Kaito is defensive and visibly irritated possibly due to their history in business but remains polite.
  • The two go back and forth in discussing business and their history/feelings with growing intensity.

 

  • Kaito eventually says they cannot meet again and wishes Luis well.
  • Luis makes a last attempt to request help for his friend from Kensho family.
  • An emotionally escalated Kaito tells Luis that Kensho is doomed.
  • Luis asks what he means by that.
  • Kaito says the new leader of Shibito is close to the Kensho family and is already working on usurping their leader.
  • Luis tells Kaito he is putting himself at risk associating with Shibito’s organization.
  • Kaito tells Luis that the time of monarchistic royalty in the crime underworld is over.
  • Kaito says he supports Shibito because Shibito came from nothing like Kaito did.
  • Kaito tells Luis that Shibito understands what it’s like trying to succeed on your own in a world where family precedes merit.
  • Kaito says goodbye and tells Luis he would do well to stay away from all of this.

 

  • Senshi realies Kenichi is Shibito or rather he is pretty damn sure.
  • Senshi is confused and enraged.
  • Senshi now understands how Kenichi knew about the delivery & why it went wrong.
  • Senshi is heartbroken above all else and wants to confront Kenichi and find out why.
  • Senshi immediately smashes the phone Kenichi gave him (Luis replaces it later)
  • Senshi explains what’s going on to Hina who understands but doesn’t know to the full extent.
  • Senshi jumps in the driver seat of the van and takes off without warning.
  • Right as Kaito gets into his car Senshi smashes into the back of it with the van, causing the airbag to pin kaito and keep him from running.
  • Senshi jumps out, opens his door, pulls him out, strangles him, and tosses him in the back of the van.

 

  • Senshi drives out of the alley and tells Luis to hop in.
  • Luis hops in and they get out of there.
  • A panicked Luis asks what the hell he is doing..
  • Senshi says he’ll explain on the way back.
  • Senshi pulls into another alley and tells Luis to change the exterior markings of the van which he does.
  • Senshi asks Luis if he can take the wheel so he can secure Kaito
  • Luis looks back to see an unconscious Kaito and becomes angry.
  • Luis yells at Senshi while he ties, gags, and blindfolds Kaito
  • Hina tells Luis it’s okay & he doesn’t have to know Luis is involved.
  • The three make their way out of the city and back to Luis’

 

  • The three get back and unload everything including Kaito.
  • They put Kaito in a secured room in the basement and take a second to relax after everything that just happened.
  • Lius says he gave Kaito a mild tranquilizer for convenience and he should wake up in about an hour.
  • Senshi tells Luis about Shibito/Kenichi and what he has done.
  • Senshi says he only wants information from Kaito and if all goes well they can just bring him back to the city after.
  • Luis says he already disabled Kaito’s phone and is currently running a program to scrub it for data.
  • Senshi says he thinks Kenichi was tracking him from his phone so he destroyed it.
  • Luis says he will hook him up with another phone.
  • The three sit down and brainstorm what questions they want to ask Kaito and start writing them down.
  • Luis goes back inside to check the progress of Kaito’s phone.

 

  • Hina and Senshi go for a walk and talk about Shibito and their situation.
  • Senshi is torn over how to approach Shibito now that he knows it’s Kenichi.
  • Senshi is furious and hurt but he believes Kenichi is good and must not be okay to act in a way that is so far removed from his true self.
  • Hina reminds Senshi of their mission and asks if he has a plan.
  • Senshi says he feels stuck because he was betrayed and wrongly exiled, but betrayers get executed so he feels as though he cannot act without knowing for sure.
  • Hina asks if he could meet with Kenichi as a friend similarly to how Luis met Kaito.
  • Senshi says it is a bit of a gamble because if Kenichi was tracking and possibly recording him then he will know something is up.
  • Senshi says it’s iffy but he cannot think of a better option than meeting up with Kenichi for the purpose of getting him to divulge something that will incriminate himself.
  • Senshi feels overwhelmed by his predicament and just wants to relax for now.
  • Senshi says they can cross that bridge when they get there.

 

  • Senshi asks if Hina has heard from her grandma.
  • Hina says she has not but Luis is working on getting access to the security cams to check on her.
  • Senshi says he appreciates her help so far and will do everything he can to reunite them.
  • The two go back and meet up with Luis
  • Luis tells them he finished scrubbing Kaito’s phone and found some troubling things.
  • Luis says Kaito was not tricked into betraying him but rather chose to for his own gain.
  • Luis is keeping it together but he is clearly not as cheery as he was that morning.
  • Luis said he found messages between Kaito and Shibito where they discuss setting Senshi up and eliminating him.
  • Senshi feels anger and apprehension about his and his family’s safety.
  • Senshi is now certain that he must confront Kenichi and set things straight.

 

  • Senshi tells Luis he is sorry about Kaito and that he appreciates all of his help.
  • Luis gives an affirmative nod and says he wants to talk to Kaito when they’re done questioning him.
  • Senshi questions Kaito and learns that Kenichi was planning on doing things peacefully by taking Senshi’s place as successor and merging Kensho and Shibito families.
  • Hina questions Kaito about her grandma
  • Kaito tells her she is being well cared for and not mistreated.
  • Kaito says her grandma’s health is declining as is the ancient family gardens.
  • Hina is more determined than ever.
  • Luis goes in and takes the bag off Kaito’s head.
  • Luis shows Kaito his own messages proving he knowingly chose to betray Luis in a horrible way which Luis has been suffering for ever since.
  • Luis slowly methodically puts earplugs in and says goodbye to Kaito before shooting him in the heart, looking him in the eyes while he bleeds out.

 

  • The three carry out the body on a cart and burn it in Luis’ illegal custom incinerator for trash.
  • Luis keeps a few of Kaito’s things including his necklace and says he plans on returning it to Kaito’s family.
  • Luis invites them to drink and get skeeted (do cocaine) with him and spend the night entertaining themselves with his myriad of technological toys.
  • They agree and start drinking and doing lines.
  • After a few hours of hedonistic indulgence, the three open up to each other a bit and discuss their situation.
  • The three finish off the night by smoking a mixture of hash and opium to come down.
  • The three each go back to their rooms and end their night how they want and go to bed.
  • The next morning they wake up and all contribute to cooking a communal breakfast with coffee.
  • They all feel a little bit closer to each other and are more comfortable around each other.

 

  • Senshi tries to sleep but can’t get over the betrayal
  • Senshi gets fed up and leaves in the middle of the night
  • Senshi drives into town and reminds himself of his conviction to overcome the fear of the risk he is about to put himself in.
  • Senshi gets emotional as he confirms to himself that he must make himself look like the failure he can’t stand to be, but reminds himself that backing down is worse than failure.
  • Senshi has Kaito’s phone and prepares to use it in his plan to deceive Shibito members to grant him access to their leader.
  • Senshi configures his phone to auto-dial and share his real-time location with his father’s cell phone at a specific time which should be shortly after he arrives.
  • Senshi reaches the location of Hina’s family compound.
  • Senshi collects himself and nervously checks his equipment.
  • Senshi looks in the mirror and removes the make-up covering the dragon tattoo near his eye.
  • Senshi is visibly frightened for his life while he backs the car in a nearby hiding spot.
  • Senshi exits the car and puts the keys behind the door for the charging port.
  • Senshi puts his handgun in his underarm holster and tucks his phone in his underwear.

 

  • Senshi walks up to the door with his head down.
  • The two men guarding the door demand him to identify himself.
  • Senshi continues approaching and they draw their weapons demanding he prove his Shibito allegiance.
  • Senshi keeps walking and puts his hands up.
  • The two men fire a warning shot which alerts everyone inside the front lounge/club area.
  • He reaches the two men who beat him down and subdue him.
  • Senshi feels the single vibration from his phone indicating it has been activated to contact his father.
  • The men see his tattoo and attempt to interrogate him about his reason for coming.
  • Senshi spits blood out and says their leader is in danger.
  • They are shocked and confused so they ask what he means.

 

  • Senshi keeps his hands out in surrender and says he has a handgun in his jacket.
  • One man aims to shoot him.
  • Senshi frantically tells him to wait and listen.
  • Back at home, Ryu has been listening to all of this happening and gathering a group to go rescue Senshi.
  • Senshi keeps speaking so his father will hopefully know he is alive.
  • Senshi tells them he was going to say he has a phone in the pocket near his gun.
  • Senshi tells them it is Kaito’s phone and that Kaito tried to kidnap him but he beat Kaito who subsequently fled.
  • The man asks why that means Shibito is in danger.
  • Senshi is not only speaking to his attackers but also to his father and anyone listening through the phone so he chooses his words for that purpose.
  • Senshi says Kaito took him by surprise and had him subdued at first after which he told Senshi that Shibito was secretly a part of Senshi’s family and he planned on using Senshi to expose Shibito and take his place.

 

  • The men say he is telling lies.
  • Senshi encourages them to take Kaito’s phone and to check the messages.
  • Senshi said he had no accomplices in this endeavor but he mentioned the many ways he was dealing behind Shibito’s back and betraying them all.
  • The men open the un-encrypted phone and find all the messages about his private dealings which were shady to Shibito clan but not necessarily proof.
  • The men point this out and say they will find Kaito and get to the truth but they take him hostage until their boss gives orders.
  • The second man asks why he would come to them with this.
  • Senshi reacts with genuine anguish and tells them the truth of his situation; that he has failed his father and has been exiled from his family but he fears for their safety.
  • Senshi says they have never been friends but that he doesn’t want betrayal and destruction to come to his family just as they don’t want it to come to theirs.
  • Ryu hears all of this over the phone from the bluetooth in his car which is speeding to the location on the map.
  • Kenichi is next to Ryu hearing all of this and is in full panic internally while trying to keep his cool on the outside.

 

  • Kenichi changes his appearance to look more like a base level enforcer rather than the high-ranking officer that he is so he will not be recognized.
  • Senshi’s father explains to the rest of them that they must do this to not seem weak but in reality he is extremely fearful for his son who is in danger.
  • Kenichi feels threatened since his operation is at risk of being exposed.
  • He doesn’t know that Senshi is on to him, so he just wants to get out of there ASAP.
  • Kenichi puts on gloves to cover the identifying tattoo of a skull with a bullet hole in the forehead on the back of his hand.
  • Ryu and company approach the door and Ryu explains that they are there to peacefully make a deal for Senshi’s safe return.
  • The doorman demands they lay down their arms.
  • Ryu says he must respectfully decline and suggests they do the deal outside instead because they only want Senshi back and that’s it.
  • Ryu requests to speak with whoever is in command to get this exchange underway.
  • The doorman says he will relay the message and gets the response from the official in charge.

 

  • The man who has assumed command is a mid-level official who is using this as an opportunity to put on like he is more important than he is and elevate his own status.
  • The groups enter negotiations and the Shibito stand-in is unaware his boss is present so he takes every opportunity to minimize Shibito and inflate his own significance.
  • The stand-in wants to sieze power and recognition and Kenichi is enraged at this man diminishing him and his accomplishments.
  • Kenichi is barely holding it together and is fighting the urge to shoot his subordinate and reveal the truth of his actions.
  • They come to an agreement and Kenichi sees Ryu accept Senshi back into the family while Kensho pass off money to his untrusted lieutenant.
  • Kenichi loses his cool and goes off on everyone
    • Ryu for being too passive
    • Senshi for being a fuck-up
    • His lieutenant for being a snake
  • Kenichi gets emotional as he tells Senshi he doesn’t have what it takes to lead.
  • Kenichi says he must do this to protect the future of Kensho family.
  • Kenichi draws a pistol and shoots Ryu in the gut
  • Senshi surrenders to his inner rage and grabs a brick of C4 from the car, tossing it and detonating it in the middle of the firefight bringing the action to an end for now.
  • Nearly everyone is either dead or injured while Senshi and Kenichi are the least injured.
  • Senshi approaches with a handgun while Kenichi is unarmed and tells him to settle it one on one to show he has what it takes.
  • Kenichi agrees agrees and stands up to face Senshi.
  • Before he gets situated he pulls a knife on Senshi and tries to stab him in the heart.
  • Senshi blocks with his gun hand, retains a minor wound and loses his gun an control of the situation.
  • Kenichi tells Senshi this is why he doesn’t have what it takes to handle a life of crime.
  • Kenichi says Senshi has always been privileged and sheltered because he has always had the security Kenichi was never given.
  • Kenichi says he deserves to be don because he has earned it pointing out that he has outperformed Senshi in every way.

 

BLACK MOMENT:

Senshi is mortally wounded again after which Kenichi explains he did it to protect the family from a future where Senshi becomes the new Kensho syndicate leader, as he believes Senshi would destroy the organization and himself.

 

  • Senshi is forced to face the shame of being reminded that his incompetence is the reason for all this conflict and suffering
  • At the same time, Senshi was also forced to face the reality that he was bested by Kenichi practically effortlessly, which reinforced his beliefs of his own worthlessness.

 

EPIPHANY:

After being defeated by Kenichi, Senshi realizes that it his inability to let go of his perception of himself as a failure which is the reason he has been unable to escape it, and that the only way to change is to set that aside and do everything in his power to accomplish what needs to be done for himself and his family.

 

  • Senshi has a brief opportunity to recover and overcome Kenichi and realizes he must take action to do what must be done, despite how he feels about it.